Sunday, December 5, 2010

Research Paper.. Thank you Benito for Posting up your notes..

Oh darn...i forgot two sections. ughhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

What I need to incorporate:

Did my findings match the literature review?
I need a methods section. How many observations did I conduct??
Fix my headings, they are a little confusing. Add some more parts of text in each analysis.



Angela Castillo
December 7, 2010
Eng 5070: Peer Tutoring


Final Essay: Using Response Time and Silence in Tutoring Sessions

Many writing centers are based on theories of social constructivism which emphasize the role of conversation and language in learning (Reigstad, 1). However, it is also important to understand that silence plays a significant role a writer’s ability to reflect, revise, and construct ideas. The concept is often overlooked.

According to Reigstad, in a student- centered tutoring session, writers are “encouraged to do most of the talking and most of the work” (25). Reigstad mentions that in tutoring sessions, it is important for tutors to “listen a great deal” as well as “ask a few questions” in order for the student to strengthen his/her or writing (25). One type of tutoring technique that uses this approach was founded by Jeff Brooks. Known as Minimalist tutoring, this technique consists of the tutor asking a few open ended questions while allowing students spend the majority of the time talking about their writing (Brooks). Although minimalist tutoring may be the technique that requires tutors to consciously make an effort to implement silence the most, this research explores the different ways, tutors use silence in their sessions.

Brief Overview of Literature on Conversation

Before highlighting the significance of silence, it is vital to explore why conversation and language are central to writing center philosophies. In the book entitled “Peer Tutoring”, Wendy Bishop stresses the role of conversation and regards “talk as being central to the process of writing” (4). She also relates conversation to inner speech. According to Bishop, “writers compose through inner speech while talking, by speaking aloud at the word processer, when discussing a wok-in progress, or as they share ideas during conferences in writing centers and in classrooms” (4). According to Reigstad, during a session, conversation can take form in the following ways through, “developing ideas or sections of the draft, developing rhetorical constraints, answers to open ended questions from the tutor, praises of well crafted phrases and sentences, role-playing audiences, or simply reading the draft aloud” (4-5).

Brief Overview of Literature on Silence

In an academic setting, silence was viewed as a problem. It had negative connotations attached. Yet researchers have been trying to change the stigmas attached with silence. According to researcher Anne Rugges, “instead of seeing silence as speech's opposite, we can conceive of it as a part of speech, located on a continuum that puts one in dialogue with the other”. Researcher Cheryl Glenn regards silence as “a rhetorical art, one that can be as powerful as spoken word” (page 18). Unlike Wendy Bishop, researcher James Moffett relates silence to “inner speech”. He claims that inner speech is an act of thinking which offers a chance for a writer to “get beyond what one has already heard and said and read about something and just focus on the sub- ject non-discursively-that is, just hold centered in consciousness some idea, emblem, or phrasing of the subject, and sink deep in without trying to have thoughts about it.” ( 242). He states that writing is a form of revised inner speech (233).
The observations for this research essay were conducted at Kean University’s Writing Center. The notes focused on the dialogue between the tutors and students as well as periods of silence. In this study, silence was identified as pauses and waiting. As the tutoring sessions took place, observations were typed on a laptop.

The following session displays a directive style of tutoring in which a student is not given much of a chance to talk. In this session, the student’s answers were short while the tutor continued to elaborate on the topic. In addition, although the student was silent most of the time, it also seemed as though the tutor may not have allowed the student enough time to write in silence. During this session, the student brought in an analysis paper for her English 1030 course. In this session, the tutor only engages in conversation that is directly related to the assignment. In addition, the session begins with the student reading her paper out loud but the tutor quickly takes over and starts to read the paper aloud instead.

Scenario One: Olivia and Melissa

As Melissa holds her pen in her hands, she slightly slouches. Although they were sitting eye level of each other, Melissa does not make eye contact with her tutor Olivia. Olivia reads Melissa’s paper out loud and uses a pen to trace across each sentence.

Olivia: what else do you want to tell me?

Melissa has a very soft voice and Olivia speaks in a loud direct voice. Melissa indicates that she wants to work on grammar.

Oliva: Don’t’ worry about punctuation or grammar. We are free writing, tell me everything really quickly.

Melissa starts to speak softly to Olivia.

Olivia: Okay what else?

Melissa responds softly.

Olivia quickly asks, “What does that mean?”

Melissa then responds again. Her comments are soft spoken making it difficult for observers to understand what she said.

Olivia :“Why don’t you write that down? It is important. How big is it? It must be expensive. You want to tell me that. What is it? It is bigger than my house. Do I have room for this . Do I have to move out? How do I Do it? Okay so you want to tell me…

At this point Melissa looks like she is trying to write some ideas down.

Olivia: I’m sure you want to tell me. It has lots of wires and someone who knows how to do it as well.

Olivia and Melissa: Conversation Analysis

During the session, the tutor continued to talk and asked a series of close ended questions. The tutor asked these questions without leaving the student a chance to answer each one. She asked one after another to possibly create a point. She spoke fast. Based on this portion of the observations, it shows that that tutor asked more close ended questions that open ended questions. This allowed the student to answer briefly.

The coach asked a combination of open and closed ended questions consecutively which may not have given enough time for the student to process them. The student often answered in short sentences and the tutor spoke longer in longer more direct statements.

Based on these observations, it appeared that the tutor directed the student in what she should do for the paper. Therefore the student was listening for most of the time instead of talking. However, the student was able to get writing done. She even read out loud but did not talk as much as the tutor did.

It appeared that tutor was focusing on some high order concerns. However, she seemed to be teaching instead of actually allowing the student to negotiate her choices or explain what she wanted to do with her paper. The student needed to work on her thesis and organization of the ideas. It was clear that the tutor was trying to get the student to elaborate on those points but it seemed as though the tutor was telling the student what to do. In addition, the tutor only spoke about the assignment. It may have not allowed the student a chance to become comfortable with the tutor. According to McAndrew and Reigstad a tutor should not “overlook the power of simply engaging in natural conversation with the writer, bantering back and forth about mutual interests...” (34). The lack conversations on mutual interests may have also contributed to the student’s silence.

Olivia and Melissa: Silence Analysis

It seemed as though silence came from the student and not the tutor. Since the tutor was talking most of the time, it appeared as though the student was not given enough chances to talk. However, she may not have had a chance to completely concentrate either.

This is because it seemed as though the tutor was rushing the student. She spoke so quickly and even during times when the student was writing. Though it seemed that that tutor was talkative, the tutor may have felt that she was just encouraging the student.

Olivia and Melissa: Cause and Effect Analysis

The tutor asked many questions, both open ended and closed ended. Although she may have been attempting to clarify the focus of the paper, she may not have given enough time for the student to process the questions because they were consecutive and the tutor spoke in a faster speed as she asked the questions

In regards to periods of silence, it seemed that because the tutor was talkative throughout the entire session, the student remained quiet and listened most of the time. Also, because the tutor spoke even during times when the student was writing, it appeared as though the student was not given a chance to think in a quiet environment.

Based on my analysis, the student did not speak much because of the tutor’s tone of voice, direct statements, and rapid consecutive closed ended questions. Because the tutor spoke louder with direct statements and fast paced open and closed ended questions, the student may have been under the impression that the session was "teacher based".

The following session displays what happens when a tutor allows a student enough time to write in silence. The times are indicated in this observation in order for readers to identify how much time the tutor allowed the student to write in silence.

In this session, Molly is identified as the tutor and Dana is the student. Dana needed to work a paper for her course on information management. She had concerns about structure and grammar. Throughout the session, Dana reads her paper out loud.

Scenario Two: Molly and Dana

1:07 pm Dana points to a section on her paper and says “maybe I can take this and move it here”

Molly: What do you think? Do you think it should be the last one?

1:08 pm As Dana works on her paper, Molly is silent. She allows Dana time to reorganize some ideas.

1:10 pm Dana points to a section on her paper and Molly looks along. Dana says : Okay, what do you think about this?

Molly: I’m not sure if that is indicating ownership. Is that what you mean?

Dana: Okay, so I guess I don’t need it.

Molly then looks where Dana is pointing. Molly than says “I think you can move it over..”

Molly then remains silent.

Dana writes on her paper.

1:13 Dana then reads her paper out loud. Molly looks along.

Molly reads along.

Dana then pauses.

Molly points to the section where the student left off and says “How can we make this present tense?”

Molly and Dana: Conversation Analysis

Molly uses a series of questions in order to clarify what Dana is trying to convey in her paper. The questions that Molly uses, guides Dana in the development of her focus. Molly used questions such as ,“What do you think?” and “Do you think it should be the last one?” These questions gave ownership back to the writer, allowing Dana to find the answers within herself. According to Reigstad, researcher Atwell “emphasizes the importance of students maintaining ownership of their work”(19).

In addition, Molly allowed Dana to do most of the talking in the tutoring session. In regards to the act of talking, Reigstad claims, “The talk that’s involved in the tutoring also affects the relationship between the tutor and the writer. A writer who spends time talking to a tutor cannot help but understand that the tutor cares about her and her growth as a writer” (5).

Molly and Dana: Silence Analysis

In this tutoring session, Molly was able to give Dana time to write in silence. Her silence is identified as pauses between speech. Time stamps are indicated to show how many minutes Molly would stay silent after asking Dana a question. Based on the time stamps, Molly allowed Dana between two to three minutes in order to write some ideas down. This is much different from the observations on Olivia and Melissa.

Molly’s silence allowed Dana enough time to gather her thoughts and connect with her inner speech. According to Reigstad, “Writers should feel welcome to explore their own ideas and find their own ways to express them, without unwelcome intrusions from the tutor” (19).

Molly and Dana: Cause and Effect Analysis

Molly did not directly answer any of Dana’s questions. Instead, she would rephrase the question in order for Dana to find the answers within herself. Because of this, Dana was able to gain ownership of her paper. Molly validated Dana’s ideas and allowed Dana to do most of the talking. This act may have been empowering for Dana. According to Reigstad, “being an effective tutor means equipping writers with strategies for discovering their own answer. . .”(20).

In addition, because Molly gave Dana moments to think in silence, Dana was able to revise inner speech and develop her ideas on paper. According to leading compositionist James Moffett, writers “must talk through silence and stillness in order to find original thought” (Glenn, 156). Dana was encouraged to do this through Molly’s silence.

Scenario 3: Javier and Lily

In this writing session, the student was not a native English speaker. The student came to the writing center in order to work on a research essay. The student in this observation is known as Lily. Javier is the coach. Throughout the session, Javier uses a directive style of tutoring. In addition, Javier uses silence in the session whenever he becomes frustrated with the student. Throughout the session, Javier and Lily start discussing grammar. However, Lily’s professor specifically told her that her summarizing needed improvement. In the beginning of the session Lily mentions some of the words come from the actual article so she can appear smart. The observation notes are as follows:

Javier: Pretend the person reading your essay is an idiot.

Lily wants focus on grammar. Javier wants to discuss summarizing, but since Javier read the article and does not stray away from Lily’s questions regarding the reading.

Javier seems frustrated. He begins huffing and puffing and becomes silent. Javier compares Lily to students that he has had in the past.

Javier then refuses to visit piece of writing that Lily wants to discuss.

Javier begins to go through writing mechanics.

Javier: Do you understand this writing?

Lily laughs in response to the question.

After that remark, the student’s tone seemed to get lower when she spoke about her writing. However, she copied word for word what the coach was saying, she replied with loud “uh huh” in loud tones. For the remainder of the session, Javier began to dominate the conversation by giving clear specific directions. This is mentioned in the following:

Javier: Put performance instead of play.

Lily: ok.

As writer is going over writing, she is becoming lost and saying she does not know if it is correct.

Lily says she is not able to come up with the exact vocabulary.

Javier: You always come up with complex stuff.

Lily appeared to assume that all of what she discussed is wrong.

Lily: I hate this

Javier goes back to grammar, direct word usage. He replaces her word choice with his own and gives Lily the exact sentences to write.

Lily asks for clarification on whether her writing makes sense.

Javier: Once you get used to the English-thing, it should be okay.

Javier and Lily: Conversation Analysis

It appeared that the student was clearly uncomfortable and lacked confidence in her writing due to language barriers. The tutor approached the session by telling the student to pretend that the person she is reading to is an idiot. The term “idiot” may have been used in a playful manner, but the student may not have understood what the tutor was implying. However, the tutor may have tried to say this in order for the student to feel like she was the expert on the topic. The tutor may have been trying to achieve what was discussed by researcher Dianne Stelzer Morrow, who states that a tutor “should not feel inadequate if she can’t answer a writer’s question. Sometimes the best reader is a “dumb reader”, one who is not an authority in the subject matter. The tutor can fill that role “(Reigstad, 20). However, this may not have worked in Javier and Lily’s case.

In addition, it seemed as though the tutor took on a more authoritarian role. This may have been influenced by the tutor as well. According to Reigstad, there are different teaching patterns among various cultures (99). Reigstad states that many “ESL students have a much more authoritarian view of teachers. They don’t question teachers and don’t expect to be questioned by them, as usually happens in tutoring sessions; instead they expect to give answers as direct statements” (99)

Javier and Lily: Silence Analysis

Unlike the silence or lack of silence presented in the first two scenarios, the silence in this session was generated out of frustration and took form through a series of breaths. According to this observation, Javier huffed and puffed after he was frustrated. This type of silence did result in a positive outcome. Although the student was able to write comments on her essay, her essay was merely dictated to her, therefore she was unable to learn how to correct her own errors.

Although it may be easy to point out the faults of the tutor in this session, it could also have been due to lack of experience and inadequate training. The tutor’s silent frustration may have indicated a sign of hopelessness. In this specific case, the tutor may have only had less than a week of tutor training in regards to multilingual non native English speakers which contributed to his frustrations.

Javier and Lily: Cause and Effect Analysis

In the beginning of the session, it seemed that the tutor was trying to stay away from grammatical issues and wanted to focus on the student’s summarization. The tutor appeared aware of the differences between high order concerns and low order concerns.

However, it appeared that the student had a different agenda and insisted on working on grammar issues. This could have been prevented if the Javier told Lily to “focus on just one or a few problems at a time; and explain to the writer that miscues are a natural part of learning and using language, even for native speakers” (Reigstad 98).

It seemed as though the tutor grew frustrated and just decided a more direct approach with the student. Yet, this approach may have allowed the student to feel worse about her writing. During the instance in which she expressed confusion and a desire to change her vocabulary, Javier replied by saying “You always come up with complex stuff”. This comment may have belittled her even more. In response to his comment, she immediately said,“I hate this”. This may indicate that the student felt a sense of helplessness throughout the entire tutoring session.

Conclusions

Based on these observations and reviews of literature, silence or lack of silence on behalf of the tutor can either discourage or encourage students to write in a tutoring session. It all varies depending on the situation.

In the first case, lack of silence may have prevented the student from revising her inner dialogue and becoming fully aware of the ideas that she wanted to convey on in her writing. Although the tutor talked throughout the majority of session, the student appeared to leave the session satisfied. Although the tutor took a more direct, authoritative approach, the student was able to leave the session with writing done. However, the student may have only felt confident in her writing because she was not encouraged to speak throughout most of the session and was straight forwardly directed by the tutor in terms of what she should write.

In the second scenario, the tutor gave student a couple three minute intervals of silence in order to write her ideas down. That session seemed productive and the student was able to share her thoughts and read her work out loud to the tutor. She appeared to have left the session with a sense of satisfaction and a strong sense of confidence in her writing.

However, silence on behalf of the tutor may not always lead to positive results. Silence from a frustrated tutor can result in an ineffective tutoring session. In the last scenario, the tutor became silent when he realized that the student was only concerned with grammatical issues. His direct, authoritative style of teaching led to the student writing every word that he said. The tutor also appeared to make some insensitive comments to the students which may have contributed to the student leaving the session with a sense of confusion and lack of confidence in her writing.

Though this study reflects the different uses of silence in tutoring sessions, this topic can be further explored through a series of observations in different writing centers across the nation, satisfaction surveys from both student and tutor, and information about the types of training that each tutor had.

Because there are not many books or articles written about the effects of silence in education, this type of study may be useful to researchers. These types of situations may also help tutors handle particular “what if” scenarios and can be used in order for tutors to discern when it is appropriate to incorporate silence and how they will use it in their sessions. These scenarios may be helpful in future tutor training through workshops, online videosm and peer tutoring books.

Works Cited

Brooks, Jeff. "Minimalist Tutoring: Making the Students Do All the Work." Writing Lab Newsletter. Purdue University, Feb. 1991. Web. 1 Dec. 2010. .

Barnett, Robert W., and Jacob S. Blumner. The Longman Guide to Writing Center Theory and Practice. New York: Pearson Longman, 2008. Print.

Gere, Anne R. "Revealing Silence: Rethinking Personal Writing." College Composition and Communication 53 (2001): 203-23. JSTOR. Web. 20 Nov. 2010. .

Glenn, Cheryl. Unspoken: a Rhetoric of Silence. Carbondale: Southern Illinois UP, 2004. Print.

McAndrew, Donald A., and Thomas J. Reigstad. Tutoring Writing: a Practical Guide for Conferences. Portsmouth, NH: Boynton/Cook, 2001. Print.

Moffett, James. "Writing, Inner Speech, and Meditation." College English 44.3 (1982): 231-46.JSTOR. National Council of Teachers of English. Web. 1 Dec. 2010. .

Tuesday, November 30, 2010

Blog 18

Because I had to change my topic, I had to gather different sources. The sources I found so far are as follows.

http://library.kean.edu:2058/stable/pdfplus/359076.pdf?acceptTC=true

Revealing Silence: Rethinking Personal WritingAuthor(s): Anne Ruggles GereSource: College Composition and Communication, Vol. 53, No. 2 (Dec., 2001), pp. 203-223Published by: National Council of Teachers of EnglishStable URL: http://www.jstor.org/stable/359076

http://library.kean.edu:2058/stable/pdfplus/358625.pdf

Silence: Reflection, Literacy, Learning, and TeachingAuthor(s): Pat BelanoffSource: College Composition and Communication, Vol. 52, No. 3 (Feb., 2001), pp. 399-428Published by: National Council of Teachers of EnglishStable URL: http://www.jstor.org/stable/358625Accessed: 29/11/2010 23:06

Jacobs, Suzanne, and Adela Karliner. "Helping Writers to Think: The Effect of Speech Roles in Individual Conferences on the Quality of Thought in Student Writing." College English 38 (1977): 489-505.

Bruffee, Kenneth A. "Peer Tutoring and the 'Conversation of Mankind.'" Writing Centers: Theory and Administration. Ed. Gary A. Olson. Urbana, IL: NCTE, 1984. 3-15

Catterall, James S.(2005). Conversation and Silence: Transfer of Learning Through the Arts. Journal for Learning through the Arts, 1(1). Retrieved from: http://escholarship.org/uc/item/6fk8t8xp

http://ultibase.rmit.edu.au/Articles/online/benfield1.pdf

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What I’m going to do…

In the sample paper, they talked about they talked about the different relationships and the different uses silence and say what it shows about different styles of using .

Do my middle data analysis at this point. Analyze and pick out h and sort of see the terms that I will look for in each. Identify kids of silences. Pauses, waiting, breathe.

Authority within the Silence of Tutoring Sessions

There are a variety of factors that influence who has authority in a tutoring session. This research will focus on the role that silence plays in a writer’s learning process and how it is related to authority. Although many writing centers are based on theories of social constructivism, it is also important to understand that silence plays a significant role a writer’s ability to reflect and revise and construct ideas. This study focuses on authority over the writing session in terms of conversation and silence.

Paragraph on Conversation

Section on Silence:

In an academic setting, silence was viewed as an issue. It had negative connotations attached. Yet researchers have been trying to change the stigmas attached with silence. According to researcher Anne Rugges, “instead of seeing silence as speech's opposite, we can conceive of it as a part of speech, located on a continuum that puts one in dialogue with the other”.

This session took place on a Thursday at noon. There are two distinct differences between the student and tutor. These differences are age and race. The student is African American and the tutor is Caucasian. The student is also in her early twenties, while the tutor is in her late forties or possibly early 50’s. What is clear from this observation is that the tutor was the one who took control over the session. The tutor did most of the talking while the student listened and wrote and answered the questions that the tutor asked. The student’s answers were short while the tutor continued to elaborate on the topic. It seemed as though the tutor may not have allowed the student enough time to write in silence.

During this session, the student brought in an analysis paper for her English 1030 course. Throughout the session, the tutor and the student were the only people seated at the hexagonal shaped table. The writing center was quiet. She was the only student present. There was however another tutor was present in the center, along with me (the graduate assistant) and a receptionist.

During the session, the tutor continued to talk and asked a series of close ended questions. The tutor asked these questions without leaving the student a chance to answer each one. She asked one after another to possibly create a point. She spoke fast. While they spoke they were both sitting eye level of each other. Based on this portion of the observations, it shows that that tutor asked more close ended questions that open ended questions. This allowed the student to answer briefly.

Here is an example of what was said .Please keep in mind that “Coach M” stands for tutor and “Student Z” indicates student.

Student Z holding her pen in her hand with two hands. She looks down and slightly slouches. There is a space between them. A chair can fit in the middle. Coach M has her pen tracing along the paper while she reads and the student the pen in her right hand.

Coach M: what else do you want to tell me?

Student Z: has a very soft voice and Coach M speaks kind of loud but not yelling- just speaking directly to the student.

Coach M: don’t’ worry about punctuation or grammar. We are free writing, tell me everything really quickly .

Student Z speaks so softly that I can’t hear her.

As they talk about the paper, Coach M says okay what else? Coach M twirls the pen in her hand. The student continues to talk about her paper and is speaking too softly for me to hear. Meanwhile, Coach M leans forward whenever Student Z speaks.

Coach M:s okay what does that mean?

Student Z talks.

Coach M: Why don’t you write that down? It is important. How big is it? It must be expensive. You want to tell me that. What is it? It is bigger than my house. Do I have room for this . Do I have to move out? How do I Do it? Okay so you want to tell me…

Coach M: : I’m sure you want to tell me. It has lots of wires and someone who knows how to do it as well.

The tutor directed the student in what she should do for the paper. Therefore the student was listening for most of the time instead of talking. However, the student was able to get writing done. She even read out loud but did not talk as much as the tutor did.

It appeared that Coach M was focusing on some high order concerns however she seemed to be teaching instead of actually allowing the student to negotiate her choices or explain what she wanted to do with her paper. The student needed to work on her thesis and organization of the ideas. It was clear that the tutor was trying to get the student to elaborate on those points but it seemed as though the tutor was telling the student what to do. It can be the differences in age that may impact the tutoring session. The section of the essay was analyzed according to the following categories: Conversation and Periods of Silence.

Conversation

Based on the observations, the student did not speak as much as the coach did. The coach asked a combination of open and closed ended questions consecutively which may not have given enough time for the student to process them. The student often answered in short sentences and the tutor spoke longer in longer more direct statements.

Periods of Silence

It seemed as though silence came from the student and not the tutor. Since the tutor was talking most of the time, it appeared as though the student was not given enough chances to talk. It also seemed as if the tutor was rushing the student because she spoke quickly and even during times when the student was going to write, the tutor continued to speak. Though it seemed that that tutor was talkative, the tutor may have felt that she was just encouraging the student.

· Cause and effect Analysis

In terms of conversation, the tutor asked many questions, both open ended and closed ended. Although she may have been attempting to clarify the focus of the paper, she may not have given enough time for the student to process the questions because they were consecutive and the tutor spoke in a faster speed as she asked the questions

In regards to periods of silence, it seemed that because the tutor was talkative throughout the entire session, the student remained quiet and listened most of the time. Also because the tutor spoke even during times when the student was writing, it appeared as though the student was not given a chance to think in a quiet environment.

Based on my analysis, the factors that influenced who took control of the session include the tone of voice, direct statements and rapid consecutive closed ended questions. Because the tutor spoke louder with direct statements and fast paced open and closed ended questions, the student may have been under the impression that the session was "teacher based". Finally, the last reason why it seems as though the tutor had control of the session was because she spoke during the majority of the session.

Scenario 2

Molly and Alison

1:07 Alice points to a section on her paper and says “maybe I can take this and move it here”

Molly: What do you think? Do you think it should be the last one?

1:08 As Alice works on her paper, Molly is silent. She allows Alice time to reorganize some ideas.

1:10 : Alice points to a section on her paper and Molly looks along. Alice says : Okay, what do you think about this?

Molly: I’m not sure if that is indicating ownership. Is that what you mean?

Alice: Okay, so I guess I don’t need it.

Molly then looks where Alice is pointing. Molly than says “I think you can move it over by the …s..” Molly then remains silent. She allows Alice time to write on her paper.

1:13 Alice then reads her paper out loud. Molly looks along. Molly reads along and as the student pauses, Molly points to the section where the student left off and says “how can we make this present tense?”


Tuesday, November 23, 2010

Still in process Blog 17

Blog 17: Analyze the notes from Blog 16 using the following approach.

  • What Analysis Shows: I'm GOING TO FOCUS ON Periods of SILENCE.

  • Summary of Observation

This session took place on a Thursday at noon. There are two distinct differences between the student and tutor. These differences are age and race. The student is African American and the tutor is Caucasian. The student is also in her early twenties, while the tutor is in her late forties or possibly early 50’s. What is clear from this observation is that the tutor was the one who took control over the session. The tutor did most of the talking while the student listened and wrote and answered the questions that the tutor asked. The student’s answers were short while the tutor continued to elaborate on the topic. In addition, in terms of body language, the tutor keeps a pen in her hand and traces in the air above the students sentences without actually underlining the words. After a short period of time, the student started to trace her pen over the sentences without actually underlining the words either. In addition, the student’s voice was much softer than the tutor’s voice.

  • Develop detailed descriptions of what took place in the session (actors, actions, contexts + outcomes) = the evidence you will analyze

This observation focused on the interactions between two people. These two people were the student and the tutor. The student is African American and the tutor is Caucasian. The student is also in her early twenties, while the tutor is in her late forties or possibly early 50’s. During this session, the student brought in an analysis paper for her English 1030 course. Throughout the session, the tutor and the student were the only people seated at the hexagonal shaped table. The writing center was quiet. She was the only student present. There was however another tutor was present in the center, along with me (the graduate assistant) and a receptionist.

During the session, the tutor continued to talk and asked a series of close ended questions. The tutor asked these questions without leaving the student a chance to answer each one. She asked one after another to possibly create a point. She spoke fast. While they spoke they were both sitting eye level of each other. During this particular part of the session, the paper is directly in front of the student not J. Based on this portion of the observations, it shows that that tutor asked more close ended questions that open ended questions. This allowed the student to answer briefly.

Here is an example of what was said .Please keep in mind that “Coach M” stands for tutor and “Student Z” indicates student.

Student Z holding her pen in her hand with two hands. She looks down and slightly slouches. There is a space between them. A chair can fit in the middle. Coach M has her pen tracing along the paper while she reads and the student the pen in her right hand.

Coach M: what else do you want to tell me?

Student Z: has a very soft voice and Coach M speaks kind of loud but not yelling- just speaking directly to the student.

Coach M: don’t’ worry about punctuation or grammar. We are free writing, tell me everything really quickly .

Student Z speaks so softly that I can’t hear her.

As they talk about the paper, Coach M says okay what else? Coach M twirls the pen in her hand. The student continues to talk about her paper and is speaking too softly for me to hear. Meanwhile, Coach M leans forward whenever Student Z speaks.

Coach M:s okay what does that mean?

Student Z talks.

Coach M: Why don’t you write that down? It is important. How big is it? It must be expensive. You want to tell me that. What is it? It is bigger than my house. Do I have room for this . Do I have to move out? How do I Do it? Okay so you want to tell me…

Coach M: : I’m sure you want to tell me. It has lots of wires and someone who knows how to do it as well.

The tutor directed the student in what she should do for the paper. Therefore the student was listening for most of the time instead of talking. However, the student was able to get writing done. She even read out loud but did not talk as much as the tutor did.

In addition, throughout the entire session, the tutor kept a pen in her hand and the student constantly touched the paper with the pen and touched her face with the pen as well. She was also touching her cell phone that was located in the pockets of her sweat shirt.

  • Interpretation of Analysis

It appeared that Coach M was focusing on some high order concerns however she seemed to be teaching instead of actually allowing the student to negotiate her choices or explain what she wanted to do with her paper. The student needed to work on her thesis and organization of the ideas. It was clear that the tutor was trying to get the student to elaborate on those points but it seemed as though the tutor was telling the student what to do. It can be the differences in age that may impact the tutoring session. The section of the essay was analyzed according to the following categories: Body Language, Conversation, and Tone of voice.

Body Language: Initially, the tutor and student were sitting next to each other. They were both sitting upright and the tutor had a pen in her hand. Later on towards the end of the session, the student was somewhat slouching and tutor was sitting up right. The tutor kept the pen in her hand the whole time and would trace over the student’s sentences with her pen without actually writing on it. While the tutor did this, there were instances in which the student would do the same thing. However when the coach spoke to the student she would put her hands in her pocket and hold her cell phone. Coach M looked directly at the student whenever she spoke to her and the student would look up and then back down at her paper.

In addition, the student slightly slouches. This could indicate that she was not comfortable with her paper or that she may be relaxed. Meanwhile, Coach M would either lean forward or sit upright.

Conversation

Based on the observations, the student did not speak as much as the coach did. The coach asked a combination of open and closed ended questions consecutively which may not have given enough time for the student to process them. The student often answered in short sentences and the tutor spoke longer in longer more direct statements.

Tone of Voice

Coach M spoke in a louder voice than the student. The student was very soft spoken. It was difficult for me to understand what she was saying. This can indicate that the coach was confident in what she was saying but the student may not have been sure of herself. In addition, the tone of voice that the coach used appeared to be a tone that many “teachers” use in a classroom.

· Analyze the relationships within the evidence by identifying + explaining important cause and effect(and other) relationships

Because the tutor leaned forward and the student slouched, this may indicate that the tutor subconsciously showed authority in the session. She also traced over the students paper with her pen which may have given the student the impression that it was like a “teacher centered” setting.

In addition, the student would put her hands her pocket while the coach spoke.

In terms of tone of voice, it appeared that the tutor was more direct and loud. This too may have given the student the impression that the tutor was the expert. This too may indicate why it appeared that the tutor had control over the session. The student was soft spoken and may have been unsure of her writing.

In terms of conversation, the tutor asked many questions, both open ended and closed ended. Although she may have been attempting to clarify the focus of the paper, she may not have given enough time for the student to process the questions because they were consecutive and the tutor spoke in a faster speed as she asked the questions.

  • Discuss the relationships between your analysis and your overall point

Based on my analysis, the factors that influenced who took control of the session include the tutor’s age, body language, tone of voice, direct statements and rapid consecutive closed ended questions. It was evident that the tutor displayed authority in the session because of the way she was positioned, with her pen tracing over the students paper as she leaned forward. It showed that the student may not have been confident based on the way she was slouching with her hands in her pocket. Age may have also played a factor in the session. The tutor was much older than the student, which may have given the student the impression that the tutor could have been a teacher. In addition, because the tutor spoke louder with direct statements and fast paced open and closed ended questions, the student may have been under the impression that the session was "teacher based". Finally, the last reason why it seems as though the tutor had control of the session was because she spoke during the majority of the session.

Wednesday, November 17, 2010

Blog 16

11/11/10 12:00pm

Hey how are you? What’s your name? what do you have to work on?

‘Young student maybe in her twenties (African American)

Tutor is older non traiditional student, older htn 40 caucasian.

Girl said it was analysis,

J mentions thesis statement

Girl reads her paper outline

J says so yo’re saying that is yoru thesis statement.

She smiles and J asks the question, what dos th e theshsis statement sound like

Girl answer.

She is holdering her pen in her hand with two hands. She looks down and slightly slouches. THer eis a space between them. A chair can fit in the middle. J has her pen tracing along the paper while she reas and the girl hwolds the pen in her right hand.

J leans forward but the paepr is facing ht the student.

Jasks so how do you thin this sthesis statement helps the body praragraph and how it will expelian it.

J and student tllooks at each other. J says the thesis statement helsp you and me and the audience understand what the paper is focusing on.You are analyzing and showing me in essay for. So the thesis statement is people make advertisements……(J reads it and says so that is yoru thesis siatement.

Girl points to it.

J says so it is what you are focusing on in the paper. Youre telling me tha t(…………….) J reads the main idea. J says so what do you think the main focus…uhmm in the introduction what you want to say is that you’re kind of viewing this as.. magazine’s billboards and uhm this is kind of like art. It has to be creative so it grabs our attention. What you want to tell me is what you’re going to prove to me about this whole picture. So grab a pen. You’re grying to grab attention and what else do you wnatw to do.

Girl answers questions that J has and J validates it by saying so you did a lil prepwriting here..and J points to it. And she brings the paper towards her.

J says okay so you will say panasaonic is one of the main leading products in the worl.d What else do you want to tell me.

Both of them are reading with their pens. J Girl reads with her hand on her head. J then leans forward.

J tell me what you want to tell me. I’m the main audience. Write down briefly what you think I’m seeing and what you want to tell the audience cuz I don’t’ know.

Sot the girl starts to write she has one hand on the table and the other hand writing with the pen.

12:08

J looks at a picture while reading.

Girl still has her angkle crossed. J has her feet resting underneath her chair but on top of the wheels.

After girl writes J reads it and sais that is good, what else do you want to tell me about it.

Student keeps writing and reads….

J what else do you want to tell me?

Student has a very soft voice and J speaks kind of loud but not yelling just directly and not as soft as thte student.

On thing to keep note is that they are both sitting eye level of each other. And at this point the paper is directly in front of the student not J at all. J said don’t’ worry about pucntaiton or grammar. We are freewriting, tell me everything really quickly .

Student: (can’t reall hear what she is saying) .

As they talk about the paper, J says okay what else. J twrisl the pen in her hand. The girl says, something about what ht apepr is showing her. J leans foraward when girl ahs something to say. J says okay what dos that mean. Girl talks and J says why don’t you write that donw. It is important. J says okay how ti’s big, it must be expeinsive. J says okay so you want to tell me that. .

J says okayw aht is this, ti’s bgger than my house. Do I have room for this tv Do I have to move out? How do I Do it? Okay..so you want to tell me…

I’m sure you want to tell me. It has lots of wires and someone who knows how to do it as well.

12:13 J says hold on, let me get something.

J picks up a paper about how to do an analysis paper. J says I will describe what is going on and how everything fits with everything else…..

H then explains what the assignment sheet says, she reads it outloud. She points to it, both the paper and th assigmment sheet. J relates it to schools and museums.

J says, okay we have to say something about that right? Let’s talk about how that will happen right? It means millions of people will see it ? What will they do with that information? Even if it is not for a small person and honey why don’t we get this tv right? You want to tell me stuff like that. You want to assume.

J tries to explain what the analysis paper is and wha tti’s about. She reads it. The analysis paper is closer to J. the student reads along. J reads while tracing the lines with her pen.

They still make eye contact with each other and the girl talks very softly. J says what a better way to say this?

J said instead of saying “ in order to” you can say, “the best way to” what?

The girl leans forward and write son her paper. It is in the middle. It is not entirely in front of the girl.


J reassures the student and sakss her to read sentences. J then says uhmm and he holds her chin.

12:27

J leans forward and traces sentences with pen. She reads outloud . The girl taouches her mouth with her pen . She then follows where J is trachign her pen. She then holds her pen towards her mouth.

J asks the student t a question and she is quiety, she nods her head and she reads her paper silently she points to the paper with her pen. Both of them point towards the paper. J doesn’t write on the paper, she just points tow here the student has to read. J asks what hwas next. J says what she likes. She says oh wait she wants examples here.

J reads out loud again and the girl write son her paper. J then reads outloud atagn. Whil e J reads the girl moves he pen towards her mouth. J then continues to read again and says “instead of saying, you can say “Panasonic is doing the same thing’. J says right. The girl holds her pen towards her mouth when she is not writing and then J is reading outloud again sentence by sentences and says good. J then crosses something out for the student. She then reads the paepr outloud and the student is quiet.

J says’ I don’t know if you need to put this sentence right here or if you should put it later on. The girls says “well” and I think she reads tries to explain her paper.

And J backs off and continues to another section. J asks the student questions aobut her paper .

While J questions the student she uses hand gestures. Hse also has a coffee or stuarbucks drink on the table. In the center there is one person at the front desk . A student and tutor in the other hexagon table and I am seated near the table by the window while a tutor is at the computer.

12:34 at this point. J stretches her arms open to empahseize what she is saying. The girl is leanring towards the opposite side of the tutor. The tutor learns forward. The girl has her hand on her chiln. She points to her paper with a pen and asks qustiosn. J asnerwrs the question and syays “no” I like this. What else can we say about why they did it” . H leans over to turn the page in the girl’ notebook. The girl then points iwht her pen. J reachers forwards. Student the writes.

J emaphasizes the word “globa” by making the shape of a circle with her arms. J says we’re tyring to say th at we are grabbing attention, what else, one more point. J says okay what about the size of the tv. You’re talking about the first statement, what will you say? In terms of grabbing the whole statement…..

J says why will this grab attention in the middle of the musesam? Is it art?

The girl then nodes her had and says yeah.

J says they are changing the way the people are viewing life in general. J leans roward and reads the girls statement. J asks questions to guide her. The gilr is quiet. She is thinking or it appears she may be confused? Not sure. She is very quiet. Tutor is talking a lot more. Tutor asks questions to get the girl to talk a little more.

Once the girl talks, J says “great, write that down”.

J then says “okay now what else?’ “and then…” “is it something about the future?”.

J says you want to get more creative in your statement. You have to explain to me what you are talking about and how can we say it.

Looks like the gap between them got slglty bigger. The gir has her head on her hand. She holds her pen in the other hand.

12:42 J moves the paper towards the middle and the girl has her hand on her cell phone which is in her sheatshirt pocket. J moves the paper towards the girl but her hand is on it. The girl doesn’t’ have her hand on her paper. She looks down and is quiet as J reads. J says “it’s not color of tv., it’s the picture. What do we call it? High D?

Girl says Hi Def?

J Let’s fix that sentences so it includes …

Now the girl has her hand on her face.

J traces the paper while the girl reads.

The entire time J has her pen treacing the lines of the paper while th e student reads outloud. J may use this to follow along.

When the girl gets to the end of the paper.

J says what does that have to do with the paper?

Student says it has to give an illustration.

J says Okay good.

J says okay that sentence should say in which to view the picture not see the picture.

So J appeared to correct her.

12:50

J said okay you can say in the early days there was no such thing as colored pictures. You can say how far technology is coming…

At this point, student has her hand on her aper and the other hand on the pen.

J says wait hold up. You’re not going to say tv you want to take it out. Okay, there is another way to say this. No, as time when one, what happened? Tv got more???

Right exactly. Yo udon’t want to say evolved immensely…

J says No..over the last…

J says okay so you’re saying……

As J leans forward, the girl leans further away from her. And she let’s J read with the pen.

The girl then reaches forward to right but she appears to pull her hand back again.

J then says good goog good that’s good. Don’t say immensely you can say tremendously. It doesn’t fit to talk about technology. What’s next?

J says okay that is a great line. So here you’re talking about 1920 and here you’re talking about 2010.

J let th gilr read.As the girl read she had her hand on her head.

Then J stops her. We know it’s amazing

J pulled out her pda and had the girl look at the thesaurus. J sais, another word for amazing is striking or….

And the girl read over. The PDA was in J’s hands.

J said “ you don’t start a word with going’..

J says “what do we do..how do we get through…”

Girl provides answer

J Yeah that’s a good answer. ..

J so you said we’re moving . So what’s the word? Transition

Girl make sa comment and the J says, yeah you could reiterate what you said before. That’s good.

12:57 so the girl reads her paper with her hand on her head. She reads outloud but J is tracing the paper with her hand.

Girl: can I just say other person?

J says uhuh

Girl continue sot read her work out loud. She is reading everything. J nods and says right.

Then J stops her and says “why would you assume that?”

J says well there is a lot of ar tin the museum but it’s unknown and I don’t see famous artists in her but that is kind of not…it’s a good sentence but yo have to word it a little better….. Art by many different artists.

Oh sorry ok that’s about all the time we have. So you know what to do? The girl says, this is the same paragraph?

Why is it attracting the most attention? Because it is high def. this is the third you’re saying?

This one for this one.

In the conclusion you need to restate your thesis in the end of it so what you’ve seen..etc…

Student : can I put this ??

J: uh huh, exactly, as long as you haven’t said exactly…the same thing, you’re good.

Ran out of time for session.