Notes

I have notes available. I have tried my best to proofread them and make sense out of them. I type way too much for my own good. I have about 9 double spaced pages for one observation in which I watched two women of different ages and races. The tutor was an older Caucasian female who is in her late 40's or possibly early 50's. The student was an African American female who was in her early 20's. In the session, the tutor did most of the talking. The student was pretty quiet. I focused on what the tutor was saying as well as the body language between the two. Please let me know if you would like me to send you those notes.

Here is a section of my notes.

11/11/10 12:00pm

Hey how are you? What’s your name? what do you have to work on?

‘Young student maybe in her twenties (African American)

Tutor is older non traiditional student, older htn 40 caucasian.

Girl said it was analysis,

J mentions thesis statement

Girl reads her paper outline

J says so yo’re saying that is yoru thesis statement.

She smiles and J asks the question, what dos th e thesis statement sound like

Girl answer.

She is holdering her pen in her hand with two hands. She looks down and slightly slouches. There is a space between them. A chair can fit in the middle. J has her pen tracing along the paper while she reachess and the girl holds the pen in her right hand.

J leans forward but the paepr is facing ht the student.

J asks so how do you think this thesis statement helps the body paragraph and how it will explain it.

J and student llook at each other. J says the thesis statement helps you and me and the audience understand what the paper is focusing on.You are analyzing and showing me in essay for. So the thesis statement is people make advertisements……(J reads it and says so that is your thesis statement.

Girl points to it.

J says so it is what you are focusing on in the paper. You're telling me that(…………….) J reads the main idea. J says so what do you think the main focus…uhmm in the introduction what you want to say is that you’re kind of viewing this as.. magazine’s billboards and uhm this is kind of like art. It has to be creative so it grabs our attention. What you want to tell me is what you’re going to prove to me about this whole picture. So grab a pen. You’re trying to grab attention and what else do you want to do.

Girl answers questions that J has and J validates it by saying so you did a lil prewriting here..and J points to it. And she brings the paper towards her.